Welcome to Tuesday's Tales
This week's prompt word is free, and so I have picked a new scene in my wip Born Again.
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It
seemed to be a happy town. They had some kind of festivities going on in the
park today that spilled over into the streets, with stalls, their gaily
coloured awnings blowing in the breeze. Children ran up and down, carefree in
the no-car zone street, which yesterday had been packed with vehicles. Adults
strolled along some alone, others, couples holding hands. Behind the scenes
Amanda assumed there’d be stress, but looking out of her bedroom window
everything looked like one big celebration.
The
weather, too, was offering support with the sun climbing in the sky, and pretty
little white clouds floating past, some more speedily than others. Music, all
jumbled up, blared from the fairground set up on the edge of the park, which
was enjoying a busy trade. A group of three adults passed beneath her window
and she watched them head for the park. Due to the number of friends who
stopped their progress she didn’t think they’d make it anytime soon. It warmed
her heart to see the man, taller than his grey-haired companions, sling a
careless arm round the woman’s shoulders, while with the other, he cuffed the
other man on the arm and they all laughed.
A
pang of loss shot straight o her heart. This time last year she and her
grandmother used to go everywhere together. Now she was on her own. The woman
left a gaping hole in her heart and she still didn’t know what to do to fill
it. She shrugged it away. No point feeling sorrow for herself on this gorgeous
morning. Better, by far, to go out there and join the crowds.
It
didn’t matter that she’d originally intended simply to stay the one night and
move on, as she had since selling her grandmother’s house. Perhaps her friends
were right and she’d made decisions to soon after the funeral, but Amanda
needed to find herself. To discover her true self. So she’d cut ties with her
past and been moving ever since.
Thanks for reading this week's offering,
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20 comments:
Nice job. You established this happy scene, and then I was taken by surprise by the heartache felt by your character. It was a good juxtaposition, and I'd like to find out more!
I love reading about small town fairs. This was a sweet scene.
I remember that feeling of seeing everyone else around laughing and having a great time and inside you hurt so bad at the loss you are feeling that you want to scream. This emotion was very well expressed.
You really brought a sense of what it is like in the little village with the fair and people. Then her thinking about what she should do. Well done.
Nicely done. You've left me wanting more, but not hanging dangerously over a cliff. I love the way you painted the scene to be so joyful and yet she's worried. I'm looking forward to more of Amanda.
Lovely post, Sherry. Looking forward to more.
Very nice. the beginning was happy and then pow, the emotional impact. I like it!
Great job showing us the activity and liveliness of a small local fair, with the community running into friends and having a good time. Then the contrast with her emotional turmoil.
I didn't want to stop, wanted to keep going.
I felt like I was there. It reminded me of the 4-H County fair.
I like how you set the scene and made the fair beleivable
Thanks Nick, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
:-) Thanks Karen.
:-) Heare2Watts I'm glad it came across so well for you.
:-) Thanks Lindsay
:-) Jean, I'm pleased it's working for you.
Thanks Iris, :-)
:-) Thanks Jillian.
:-) Thanks Trisha
:-) Thanks Trisha
Oh, wow, Morgan, thank you :-) :-)
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