SNIPPET SUNDAY
It's been a while since I last posted for SS, and today I'm offering a few lines from my latest wip. Jarrod has just asked Lacey to accompany him to a charity dinner being hosted by the Oscar winning actor Phineas Spencer at the weekend. He finds it hard to understand when she doesn't leap at the chance.
“You’re an enigma.”
Jarrod’s muttered comment wiped the smile from her face.
“I’m as straight and uncomplicated as an arrow.”
“I doubt the victim of any arrow considers it an
uncomplicated weapon. You’re no weapon, nor are you uncomplicated.”
“If that’s how you feel about me, why are we
here?” Was that a whine in her voice? When had she become so needy and whiney?
“Hey! Lady, I never intended any insult. You’re a
strong woman, Lacey. I like that about you. But you have layers…”
“Everyone has layers.” Whine became defence and
Lacey liked it even less.
‘When your
father chucked you out of your home and out of your family.’ The thought
almost rocked her off her seat.
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14 comments:
Intriguing. I'm curious to know what's behind her defensiveness.
Afraid to believe she likable? Suspicious of anyone who finds her attractive? I heard it all in the snippet. Well done.
Thanks PT, for coming by. :-)
Oh wow, you nailed it, thanks for coming by, Gem. :-)
He's going to have to convince her she's worth it, isn't he? Can't wait to see how he does! :)
He definitely has work ahead of him. I love the last line too.
Most women become defensive about their complex natures; "I'm like an open book." Out of her past jumps the thought, to stress the point she isn't as uncomplicated as she's like to believe. Well crafted, good job.
She's suspicious of anyone who finds her appealing. Hmm...interesting.
Sarah he lands himself in a whole pile of yuck before he convinces her. :-) Thanks for coming by.
:-)Thanks Frank, I'm glad that line worked for you. Due to the # restrictions I had to leave out the previous line so wasn't sure it the impact would be as good.
Thanks for your kind words and company, Rayne ;-)
:-) Thanks for coming by Karen.
Intriguing snippet :-)
Being complicated is not necessarily a bad thing. Lacey needs a little bit of self love and Jarrod sure needs to be a bit more careful about judging her and putting labels.
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