“You—!”
Honor remembered to lower her voice and started again. “Are you implying we are
going to ride through the water?” Consuela, she noted, didn’t appear any more
pleased with this plan than she did. “But it is dark, what if we slip and
fall?”
“What
if those behind us catch up?” Juan snapped back, his patience dwindling.
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23 comments:
He's got a point! Great sense of urgency in this snippet. Nice job!
(BTW-I couldn't find your Sweet Saturday post! May be my computer.)
Jenna, thanks for your kind words, It's back up now. Somehow it reverted to draft. It's back up now.
She seems like a lot of fun. Great six
Love the counterpoint of her concerns vs his urgency (and I like him already!). Very nice!
Yes l'd get in the water - quick! Exciting six.
Point taken. Let's hustle into the boat, then we can argue.
Oh, good point--I wonder who they're running from!
Great six, Sherry! :)
~Jane~
:-) Tmonique glad you like this. I'm working on Juan's story for NaNo
Thanks Rae :-)
lol Gemma, the thought of what i was putting this lot through that night had me shivering with cold!
LOL Gem. No boat, sorry.
Thanks for coming by Jane, I'm glad I got you wondering.
Unless she can walk on the water, she should probably get in the boat!
I bet she gets on that boat. Great six!
I could feel Juan's impatience and urgency to hurry. Also, the readers get a sneak peek at both ther characters personalities. I can't wait for more.
Taryn, she's already been 'hoisted' onto a mule. No boat available! Thanks for coming by :-)
:-) Thanks for coming by Lyric I appreciate your comment.
Thanks Karen, there's a lot of angst between them, that's for sure.
Nice snippet lol :-)
Oh, I like Juan. This sounds like a great story.
:-) Thanks Elaine.
Cool six. You mentioned a mule - is that Consuela?
:-) elingregory, no, Consuela is another member of the escaping party. Thanks for coming by.
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