2 February 2014

Sunday Snippet - 2nd Feb

 
New month ~ new story.
Today I am sharing a snippet from my short Valentine story,
Queen of Diamonds,
which is part of a fifteen author
Astraea Press Anthology
and due for release shortly...
 

“How could you do this to me — again?” Sybil Diamond stormed round her brother’s living room.” I told you I wasn’t interested, and it’s the third time you’ve pulled this stunt without my permission.” She whirled on Ritchie and aimed her fist low into his gut. It did nothing to appease her rising fury when he deflected her punch. Ritchie worked out more hours daily than she spent shopping.
When she nearly tripped on his discarded shirt she swore, bent to pick it up, and threw it on top of the pile of clothes on a nearby chair. “When are you going to shovel some of this lot into the washing machine?” she demanded; hiding a satisfied smirk at her brother’s wince. He may be a world champion surfer, but much as she loved him, the guy was a slob when it came to his living quarters.
 
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There are lots more snippets from https://www.facebook.com/groups/SnippetSunday
 
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Look out for more information about the upcoming 
 Love of Diamonds Scavenger Hunt blog hop
starting the 12th of February


 
 
 

26 comments:

Jess Schira said...

You've done an excellent job blending the action and the dialogue in this snippet. I can't believe how much insight you've given to the characters in just a few sentences. It's a fun read!

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Jess, I'm delighted you enjoyed this. Thanks for coming by.

Linda said...

I'm amazed how she can go from being mad to do the cleaning so quickly.

Gem Sivad said...

So visual and real I relived a moment with my own brother. Great writing.

Siobhan Muir said...

Nothing more frustrating than a slobby brother - I have one. ;) Great snippet, Sherry.

Patricia Kiyono said...

Nice snippet! I can't wait to read all the stories in the anthology.

Cindy Amrhein said...

Wow. Excellent snippet! In only 8 sentences you set the scene, gave us their personalities and traits, and showed us the dynamics of their brother/sister relationship. Well done!

The Murders of Polly Frisch

Veronica Scott said...

Oh these people sound so real to me, terrific job with the dialog! And I loved the remark about working out more hours daily than she spent shopping. Excellent snippet!

Sarah W said...

I think you've created a perfect example of a sibling relationship!

Anger, old arguments, and nagging, with a healthy(ish) dollop of habitual enabling! :D

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Linda she did not do any cleaning, believe me, but thanks a bunch for commenting.

SherryGLoag said...

Seems like brothers are the same where ever they are!!! lol Thanks Gem.

SherryGLoag said...

rofl Siobham, thanks for coming by.

SherryGLoag said...

Likewise, Patty, I'm looking forward to reading yours too.

SherryGLoag said...

Oh my, thank you Cindy. :-)

SherryGLoag said...

LOL, thanks Veronica, I'm happy you enjoyed this.

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Sarah, :-) lol.

PT said...

Uh-oh! What did he do?

SherryGLoag said...

I'll let you know next week :-) PT. Thanks for coming by.

homecomingbook said...

What's he trying to do, set her up with a friend?

SherryGLoag said...

Well spotted, homecomingbook. Thanks for coming by. I'm still making the rounds.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Brothers! Gotta love the slobs and the interfering ways. lol Great snippet. :)

Sandra Sookoo said...

Hey, sometimes when I'm mad, I clean too :-)

Elaine Cantrell said...

I can't wait to read Love and Diamonds. I wrote a story but never submitted it. Wish I had now.

SherryGLoag said...

LOL Karen, seems it's a global phenominum (sp)

SherryGLoag said...

Sandra she didn't clean, just cleared the way so she could keep prowling. Thanks for coming by.

SherryGLoag said...

Oh, Elaine I wish you had. There are 15 authors involved and we 'think' it is going to be released tomorrow (the 5th) Thanks for coming by.