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This week our prompt word is CURLY and my snippet moves on a bit from last week and is from the third chapter. My heroine has one chance of evading her pursuers. Will she succeed? Find out more...
She
had to make a choice. And do it now. Right or left?
She
inhaled a deep slow breath and waited for the calm to flow over her. She guided the car into the left lane. Five cars separated her from her
pursuers. If traffic jammed the road
beyond the corner, she'd lose her one good chance of losing her tail.
The
lights turned green, and the cars ahead edged forwards. Crowds waiting to cross shuffled for
position; a mother grabbed a toddler who'd stepped out in front of her. Kate hit the break, swept a glance in her
rear-view mirror, smiled when she saw a bright red sports car swerve in front
of her followers, then she lifted her foot from the break, released the clutch
and eased her car round the bend, and prayed..
Immediately
she turned left again into a narrow alleyway. Someone upstairs had heard her
prayers. She slipped low in her seat and
kept a vigilant watch on the mirror above her.
The sporty red car zoomed past, followed more sedately by a silver
estate car, and a dark saloon she couldn't identify, and there! Everything shifted into slow motion as the black
four-by-four passed the end of the alleyway.
She
beat back the urge to back out and race off in the opposite direction. She forced herself to open her door and step
out from the car. She gagged at the
stench of rotting garbage. Her legs
shook so much she had to grab the car door to remain upright. Traffic noise engulfed her. Petrol fumes mingled with stale food and
rotting garbage spilling out of commercial refuse skips lining the alley walls. She inhaled it all without a thought, gasping
for air to fill lungs starved of oxygen while she half expected the black car
to return. Keeping to the shadowed side
of the alley, Kate reached the street in time to see her pursuers disappearing
round the corner. What of the second car? Had it gone straight ahead?
She
didn't have much time before they realised they'd lost her, which meant she had
to leave of the alley and away from the area.
Ten
minutes later she followed the road signs to the south coast. She needed money. Cash!
And she needed it now, before she travelled far enough to allow her
enemies to discover her destination. She
had some urgent shopping to attend to.
Within moments she pulled into a car park. She parked in a central, easily observed
spot, and, without a backward glance, headed for the shopping mall.
Families
with loaded baskets passed her on their way to their cars. Laughter and childish squeals of delight
warred with fractious voices, demanding partners and offspring do the owner’s
bidding.
Cheap
female scent and car fumes created a heady mix she longed to escape from. She entered the fist shop in the Mall and
walked through to an alternative exit.
Within moments she found a bank and using her business account, withdrew
enough cash to last her for a couple of weeks.
She hoped no one would wonder at a large cash withdrawal from her
business account. Lazily she glanced at
her surroundings. Grey-pink chairs sat
on deep blue carpet, electronically controlled doors swished open and shut as
people approached them. The sound of the
tellers’ voices, muffled by the security glass, hummed behind her. A young mother with two children clinging to
the handles of a pushchair entered.
"’Excuse
me.” Kate smiled at the young woman.
“I’m looking for a nearby charity shop.”
The
woman hesitated, a boy with curly, ebony hair, and a girl with a
blonde fall of hair to her waist, moved to cling to her legs, and they all looked as
though they hadn’t eaten in a week. “Turn right, out the door, and two doors
down.”
Before
Kate could thank her, the little family pushed past her and joined the queue
waiting for attention.
Thank you for reading this week's offering,
there are lots more amazing reads at Tuesday's Tales
there are lots more amazing reads at Tuesday's Tales
16 comments:
Nicely done sherry. Nice tension, great descriptions. Loved it.
Great sense of urgency in the snippet. Love it. :)
Wow, that was really well done. Lots of tension as well as great descriptions!
Thanks Iris, :-)
:-) Thanks Sarah. Glad you like it.
Thanks for your kind words, Vicki :-)
Wow, I love the way she maneuvers to escape the cars following her. Now if she can just get some bug out cash! Tension filled scene.
Love your descriptions of the smells she encounters and the way she gave the bad guys the slip. Very evocative writing.
:-) Flossie, I' please it works for you.
Thanks Jean, I always value your comments.
lovely work this week. I feel the urgency she's experiencing.
Your suspense writing is just as well done as your romance. My stomach was in a knot. I felt like I was in the car with her.
:-) Thanks Jillian
Wow, thanks Trisha. :-)
Lovely job ramping up the suspense. I'm anxious to see how she transforms herself.
:-) Thanks Morgan, I'm delighted you want more.
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