7 August 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Thank you to everyone who visited last week.  I appreciate your company and comments. 
This week's 'six' follows on from last week's.
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“Widow? Cadmore never said anything about a wife. He introduced me to his sister. I told you he wagered his sister against my twenty thousand pounds.”

The remembered stench of the dingy room, stale beer, and dirty, sweaty bodies that fateful night pervaded Rafe’s memory. The single overhead bulb that failed to illuminate the far corners of the room hid the gray-faced stick of a woman who’d stepped forward when commanded.

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50 comments:

lizculver said...

Great six - loved the description when he thinks back - very grim!

Cate Masters said...

Whew, powerful sensory details. Great, but disturbing, visuals.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Fantastic imagery; I especially love how you've tied memory and scent. The description of the woman is haunting and tragic.

sue said...

Yes I agree - scent is a strong trigger for memory - excellent

Jessica K said...

Incredibly atmospheric memories. Great job!

Piper said...

This is really descriptive. Excellent work. Loved the six.

Liz said...

Very compelling...makes me want to know more.
Liz

Zee Monodee said...

This is an intense scene - you show so much in these six! Great job. :)

Gayle Ramage said...

Great description, and I like the picture you've posted alongside it.

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice description. Wonder what else he'll remember? Good 6!

diannehartsock said...

Fantastic job describing the smell and feel of the room: despair. I wonder who else was in that room. Disturbing scene but I want to read more.

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

Lovely descriptions. Great Six.

Lisa Fox said...

I love the detail of the single overhead bulb. It adds so much.

Casea Major said...

Very disturbing. A man who wagers his sister? These do not sound like men you would like to know. The woman sounds pitiful. Is she the sister? Nice hook.

Sondra said...

Sounds like a despicable villain. The questions this six raises are a great hook. Love the picture you used to illustrate your selection, too.

Jenna said...

"Grey-faced stick of a woman" is so vivid! I can see her stepping from the shadows. A truly sinister six!

Graylin Fox said...

Wagered his sister? I wanna kick his ass!

Lindsay said...

Not looking good for someone and I'm in total agreement with Graylin. He needs some serious ass kicking

Lauri J Owen said...

Wow. Not good. And selling his sister is just - amazing. Horrifying.

Vivien Dean said...

Very visceral. Thanks for sharing!

Jennifer Johnson said...

Great six!

Pippa Jay said...

Urgh, very grim! From the sound of it, the sister probably would have been better off sold than stay with a brother like that.

Alix said...

You created a wonderful six, diving a very detailed image, I loved it!

Sherry Gloag said...

lizculver, thanks for your comments and visit. I appreciate them both.

Sherry Gloag said...

Cate, thanks for your comments. I'm glad they made an impact.

Sherry Gloag said...

Monica Enderle Pierce thanksfor your kind words and your visit.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks, Sue, for me it was easy to forget the sensory value in writing, recently.

Sherry Gloag said...

Jessica K thanks for your kind words.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Thanks Piper.

Sherry Gloag said...

I hope you'll come back for more next week, Liz.

Sherry Gloag said...

Zee, until I joined SSS, I admit I didn't appreciate the impact 6 sentences could have. It's one heck of a big learning curve!

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Gayle Ramage

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks for coming by, Sandra. :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Dianne Hartsock I appreciate your visit.

Sherry Gloag said...

Carrie Ann Ryan thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thank you, Lisa Fox

Sherry Gloag said...

Casea Major you are so right, Casea Major. Thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Sondra, when I saw that pi, I knew I had to use it with this clip. Thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

Jenna, that senence eventually replaced about 1500 words of useless diescription! I'm glad you liked it.

Sherry Gloag said...

Graylin Fox, there's a lot more to kick ass about than this, I hope you come back for more :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

Lindsay, as you discovered last week, Cadmore got his come-uppance!

Sherry Gloag said...

Lauri J Owen, I hope it didn't put you right off from wanting to know more.

Sherry Gloag said...

Vivien Dean, thanks for your kind words and your company.

Sherry Gloag said...

Jennifer Johnson, Thank you :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

Pippa, you make a good point! Thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Alix. I appreciate your visit and encouragement.

Paula Martin said...

Great description - can see (and smell!) it.

Jayel Kaye said...

Wonderful description

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Paula, for your kind words and company.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks, Jayel Kaye.