1 October 2011

Sweet Saturday Samples - 29th Sept.

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This week I'm sharing one more snippet of my short paranormal story, Riddick. 

“What kind of behaviour is that, I’d like to know?” Hands on hips and flashing green eyes told me what he thought of my instinctive reaction to his presence.

“I’m very sorry,” I kept my voice penitent, and reached my hand down for him to step onto. “I didn’t know you were there.

“Didn’t know I was there?” His indignation ripped over me, like waves in a storm. “Of course you knew I was there. You were looking right at me.”

“I was looking at a moth.” I corrected. He didn’t have sole rights to indignation, and mine was growing exponentially with every twist and turn in the unfolding situation.

“Like I say.” His satisfaction flowed over me liked warm honey.” You were looking right at me.”

26 comments:

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

ooh, intriguing sample! Love the last line. Thanks for sharing.

Beth Trissel said...

How very unexpected and intriguing.

Patricia Preston said...

Loved your sample. Poor moth.

Joselyn Vaughn said...

Great sample!

kayspringsteen said...

I don't think I'll ever look at tiny creatures in the same way again!

Lisa Beth said...

Awesome! I love that last line, great job!

Lindsay said...

Fun dialogue between the two

Jenna said...

Love the way this is developing! What a unique premise. :) Great sample!

Anonymous said...

Love the indignation.

Elaine Cantrell

mirriamsmyth said...

LOL great conversation here! Nice sample.

Jessica K said...

Warm honey, my goodness! What a great scene.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Jennifer, glad you like it. Thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks for your kind words, beth :-0

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Patricia. I appreciate your comapny.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Joselyn :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Kay

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks for your kind words, Lisa Beth.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Thanks for coming by Lindsay.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Thanks Jenna.

Sherry Gloag said...

LOL Elaine, me too.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Miriam.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Jessica, thanks for coming by.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

I really enjoyed your post. I can't wait to get to know your characters better, especially the little guy!

diannehartsock said...

He's very arrogant for being so small! Wonder if he can grow to man size? If so, then what! She might want to be more careful...

Thanks for stopping by my site. :)

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Sandy, thanks for coming by. I do have some major work to do on this yet.

Sherry Gloag said...

Dianne, (I'm sorry, I think I've mispelled your name a couple of times.)
Thanks for your comments and company.
I don't know what's going on, but I'm having some major problems trying to leave comments on some sites again this week.