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This week I'm sharing another snippet from a first draft of another short paranormal WIP, ~ Wolfman.
The force of its inner rage rolled across the intervening space, threatening to buckle her knees.
White-knuckled, she clutched the top of the barrier and watched the distant wolf glance toward the fascinated visitors before refocusing on the dominant male and his family.
Somehow she wasn’t surprised to see the lone male heading for the perimeter near where she stood. He ignored the interest of the rest of the pack as he drew close.
The intensity in his eyes caught and held her attention. She froze. Only the animal in front of her mattered. Broad shoulders rippled beneath his grey and silver fur. It reminded her of her husband’s shoulder-length mane of silver-blonde hair. Was the wolf’s fur soft like Alex’s hair, or coarse to the touch? Where had that thought come from?
Alex! Her heart’s silent cry filled her head.
“I’m here, Jen. I need your help to get me out.”
Jen swung round and searched the crowd. Why couldn’t she see him when he sounded so close?
28 comments:
Loved this sample! Intriguing! Would love to read more.
Great sample, intense and well written.
Very intriguing. Great show of her confusion. Thanks for sharing.
Not only am I intrigued, but so is she, LOL! Wonderful excerpt. :c)
Loved your sample. Had me wondering what happens next.
I really like this. I can't wait for you to get this one published.
boy - she's not too bright eh? very nicely done.
Um, she's not going to freak out when she figures out he's right in front of her, is she? :) Nice sample. When's this one going to be available?
I love how you portrayed this meeting -- she isn't surprised when Alex comes to her but she can't grasp that he's the wolf. Can't wait to see what she does next!
The perfect sample for Halloween! I'd love to see what happens when she realizes who the wolf is.
Intriguing sample
Thank you Jennifer :-)
Thanks melyndaprice
Thanks Lia.
Thanks Sarah, I'm glad her confusion came across.
Thanks Patricia. :-)
Thanks Elaine, There's a lot of work to do on this one, and everyones' comments have been so helpful about that.
Sue, she didn't know she'd married a shifter. This started as a *very* 'short' story so I've still to work out how didn't know.
mirriamsmyth, in the original version, no she doesn't and it's just not believable. The comments have given me encouragement to take this story uch further.
Snady, I'm glad you got her dilema. It's almost like the shock and disbelief have her moving in automatic but I am having to rethink this. Thanks for your comments.
Thanks Patricia K. I'm glad it fit Halloween, as I don't really have anything else suitable :-) lol
Thanks Lindsay.
Oh, Sherry, this is fabulous! Never forget how bribe-able I am, okay?
Wow! Didn't expect telepathic communication! Great idea. Love that she doesn't get it--yet. Do we get to see her reaction next week? Great sample.
Oh my, it's going to be hard when she realizes he's the wolf. How did it happen? Can she change him back? Want to read a lot more of this story!
Thanks for stopping by my site!
LOL, the1940mysterywriter this short story was rejected with the comment it read more like a synopsis, so I decided to put it through SSS to see whether it was worth using 'the synopsis' as the structure for my NaNo project, as I have completely stalled on my Regency.
Thanks for offering, I'll keep it in mind ;-)
Jenna, this is becoming my NaNo project so it will be completely re-written, but yes, if I get ahead with NaNo, I'll share again.
Now there's a question, Dianne, and I don't know the answer - yet! LOL.
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