This week I am continuing from where I left off last week in my Valentine Rom Com, The Wrong Target which is avaialable at Amazon,
UK koboHer words collided with his heart. Would she turn out like her mother, always wanting things her way? It sounded like his little girl almost hated him. Did she expect him to throw his weight around and demand her reinstatement in school?
Words, he mused, carried the weight of expectations. They had equal power to create great joy and intense sadness.
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Yep. Wrong words almost worse than no words. I feel his pain.
Intense emotions. I love the first line.
You've painted quite the image of this child. Love the closing thought. Nice job!
Great six, sounds like Ryan's got a rea problem child on his hands.
Wow! Intense. My heart went out to him, poor guy
:-) Thanks Gem, he's sure finding it hard not to be incontrol of the situation.
Thanks for your kind words Jess :-)
:-) Sarah, I could really feel his frustration while writing this scene.
lol Paula, the trouble with an alpha male is he often sires an ambitious and clever (should that be cunning?) child.!!! Thanks for coming by.
Hi Zee, thanks for coming by. Yeah he's out of his comfort zone in this scene.
Very insightful and filled with emotion. Nice snippet!
~Joyce Scarbrough
I could feel this scene. Feel his pain. Great job and can't wait to read more. :-)
Gah - kids always know what to say to hurt the most. Poor chap.
What a horrible position to be in as a parent. I can feel his concern and it echoes in my heart, too. Nicely done, Sherry. :)
Intense emotion in this. I really feel for him. It's hard being the parent sometimes.
Words do have tons of power--I feel his pain and hope they can work it out! :)
Oh man, can I relate! What an emotional and unique external conflict you've set up for the hero and heroine.
Aww, I so feel for him. The teenage years are such a challenge and sounds like his daughter is a real hand full. Terrific excerpt!
Intense scene -- his confusion is very clear -- poor dude. Excellent six.
Thanks for your kind comment The Belle in Blue :-)
I'm delighted you enjoyed this snippet, Brenda, thanks for coming by.
Too right Elin :-) Thanks for coming by.
Siobhan, thanks for your kind words. I'm glad i worked for you.
Joanne, you have that right. Kids know which buttons to push, don't they? :-) Thanks for coming by.
jane :-) Thanks for coming by and your comment. I agree, whether we admit it or not - words can and do hurt.
:-) Thanks for taking the time to leave a comment Karysa
:-) Thanks for your comment Veronica. And yes, you're right!!
LOL JoAnne, so true. Thanks for coming by.
Oh, I so can feel "Her words collided with his heart." Really liked this, so I backed up to the previous post. His emotion coupled with the setting (he's obviously rich) tell us so much. Very, very nice!
:-) Virginia, I'm glad you liked it enough to backtrack. And tThank you for your kind words
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