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This week I'm sharing a piece from my wip (working title -Boy) My heroine, Tiffany, is having a flashback to a time when she lived on the streets with her brother.
Why had it never occurred to her Susan’s brother
would not believe her? Because, a little voice told her, he didn’t understand
the connection between the two women. What would Jake say if he discovered
Susan shared her childhood experiences during the dark hours of night. Would
he, as Susan claimed, close up like a clam and freeze her out? He couldn’t
break the bonds of friendship she had with Susan. He couldn’t, didn’t know how
much they had in common. Her parent may not have died, and no one had actively
sought them out to place them within the system’s care regime, but she had
spent more time on the streets, than Jake would ever discover. She’d once had a
brother who’d lost his life trying to protect her from the scum that preyed on
the vulnerable.
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She’d waited, frozen to the spot, for what seemed
like hours but was, she knew later, probably only minutes, maybe even less,
before she sprinted to her brother’s side. Rain had soaked his face, diluted
the blood oozing from his mouth and chest. It didn’t take a search for his
missing pulse for Tiffany to know her brother had laid down his life to keep
her safe. She wanted to stay with him until someone found them, but knew to do
so would dishonour everything Robby had fought for. Striving to stop the
shaking in her fingers, she’d gone through Robby’s pockets, unsurprised to find
them empty, then removed his shoes and stashed the money she found there into
her bra.
12 comments:
Wow, what a intense scene. Nicely done.
Thanks Tai for your kind words.
Emotional and intense scene...how heart wrenching for her to witness...yet at the same time, it shows her strength and hardness as she faces his death and then does what needs to be done.
:-) Thanks Sarah.
This is so intense, I was hooked from the beginning
:-) Thanks Lindsay. I always value your impressions.
wow. Very compelling - and sad for her loss.
wow .... great start ... interesting and intriguing.
Thanks Jillian :-)
Thanks Iris. :-)
Good scene
:-) Thanks S.E.
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