21 January 2014

Tuesday's Tales ~ Hill



Welcome to Tuesday's Tales  
This week I'm sharing the opening of a new longer-than-short,-short-story.
 
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Jack and Jill went up the hill…
 
D. I. Rebecca Greyson tapped her pen on the photograph in her hand. What was she missing that an old, and long forgotten, nursery rhyme popped into her head?
Had young Jackson Farraday climbed up the hill?
If so why?
Why would a four year old, alone, climb up the steep slope to the popular beauty spot that overlooked the city?
“We’ve talked about going up there…” Lucy Farraday had told Rebecca the previous day, not long after she’d reported her son, Jackson, missing. “All of us, for a picnic in the summer. Jim and I,” she’d added in a soft voice, her drenched eyes turned vaguely dreamy, “used to go up there a lot.” A reminiscent smile tugged at her lips and pink tinged her cheeks. “It’s possible Jackson was conceived up there.”
 
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18 comments:

V.L. Locey said...

Wow, that grabs you right off the bat! Well done.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Vicki.

Sarah Cass said...

What an attention grabber! I like the intro to this, it definitely leaves me wanting more.

Lindsay said...

What an opening to the story. I can't wait to see where it goes and hope they find the boy

SherryGLoag said...

I'm delighted the opening grabbed you Sarah :-) The next bit of the story is posted immediately below this week's TT post if you want to read more.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Lindsay, To red the next bit scroll down to my previous post. I'll be doing a little bit more from this - but can tell you it finishes well.

Jean Joachim said...

You've sucked me in and left me hanging!! There had better be more next week. Well done. That's some hill!! I hope they find the boy, but I somehow doubt he'll be alive. Groan. MORE!

Jillian said...

I love the use of the prompt. Your post this week is a great attention grabber- can't wait for more.

writerszenblog said...

I only have one complaint ... it stopped!
I loved it - especially the opening lines. It caught me from the TT post. Excellent!

SherryGLoag said...

Jean, the next bit was actually posted first in last Sunday's snippet. I hope to do another bit this Sunday and then I'll see it I can tweak this week's TT prompt into the story but honestly it's going to be nigh-on impossible.

SherryGLoag said...

I'm happy dancing that the opening to this story has 'grabbed' you, Jillian. I loved writing this one.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) writerszenblog, thank you. If you scroll down one post you can read the next bit. I intend to add more this Sunday too.

morgan said...

Lovely heartrending opening that leaves this reader wanting more.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Morgan

Iris B said...



Can't wait for me ... nice start.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Iris

S.E said...

Very touching there is so much more I want to know now.

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks S.E. I haven't managed to tweak this to suit the 'mirror' prompt but have put a bit more up in my Sunday Snippet post if you want to read more :-)