For this week's Sunday Snippet I'm continuing from where I left off last week.
He braked to a halt, hauled in a deep breath and
eased out of his car. Shock had drained all colour from the farmer’s face where
he stood leaning against the huge back wheel of the tractor and staring into the car-wreck. Another man was
puking at the curb-side and another, his shoulders heaving, stood with his hands
clamped to what had been an open front window
Jim didn’t want to know, and couldn’t fight the
urge, the gut instinct that told him he needed to know. Without conscious
thought he dugout his mobile and dialled 999.
He doubted anyone else had, unless the drivers in the cars queuing
up on the other side of the pile-up had done so. With an unreal sense of detachment
enveloping him, Jim looked back, noted several cars had pulled up behind his
own vehicle and that no one had attempted to get out.
He couldn’t blame them. They, unlike himself,
would have no reason. They hadn’t
seen the car shoot past him on a blind bend, hadn’t recognised it, didn’t know the female
driver.
That's it for this week, :-) Thanks for coming by and you'll find lots more free-read snippets at Snippet Sunday
26 comments:
Shock?
Puke?
Decapitation?
Intriguing 8!
Oh dear! Now you've got me totally intrigued! He knows the driver?
Intense scene! I want to know more!!
Great job with the descriptions. You set a grim mood.
Loved the scene and I could sense the way she drove past him. Great job.
Tense and intriguing. Can't wait to read more on this one - excellent excerpt, vivid descriptions.
Vivid and intense. Great snippet.
What a great hook. It doesn't sound like the news can possibly be good, though.
:-)Thanks for coming by Frank, I know I'm way behind today, but hope to get round several posts tomorrow.
Yeah, Zee he does, - and the passenger.
:-)Karen, thanks for coming by. I hope to continue next week.
Thanks for visiting Willa, I admit it is darker than my usual stuff.
Thanks Brenda, I'm pleased this works for you.
:-) Thanks Veronica I appreciate your comments.
:-) Thanks Jess, I appreciate your visit.
Sarah, thanks for coming by. No, it's not good, I've surprised myself with the darkness in this story.
Sounds gruesome. I'm all angsty that's for sure.
Thanks for coming by and leaving a comment, it's appreciated, Claire. :-)
Your WWW snippet gave my goosebumps chills. I really felt I was right there at the accident. OMG. Great job!
Great description of the shocked reactions, Sherry. I've been in that sense of unreality once and everything seems to move slowly. Great snippet. :)
He knows her--is she a friend or an enemy?
Siobhan the incident of the car overtaking and having the top of the car sheared off is true, happily/remarkably, in real life both occupants survived without a scratch!!! I know because I knew them both.
And I agree about time slowing down when something like this happens.
:-) Carrie Crain Books thanks for coming by. Thankfully in real life the occupants survived.
Thanks for coming by Sue Ann :-) Plese read on next week to find out!
I'm going backwards now through the posts. Great accident scene description. Hopping in here, I want to know who the driver is and what's going to happen next.
Thanks for going back to read the previous posts, I appreciate that. In the real event, there were no causulties (amazingly) but I knew the occupants of the car.
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