Welcome to Tuesday's Tales
This week I'm sharing the opening of a new longer-than-short,-short-story.
I love getting your feedback and find it very helpful during revisions ;-)
Jack and Jill
went up the hill…
D. I. Rebecca Greyson tapped her pen on the
photograph in her hand. What was she missing that an old, and long forgotten,
nursery rhyme popped into her head?
Had young Jackson Farraday climbed up the hill?
If so why?
Why would a four year old, alone, climb up the
steep slope to the popular beauty spot that overlooked the city?
“We’ve talked about going up there…” Lucy Farraday
had told Rebecca the previous day, not long after she’d reported her son, Jackson,
missing. “All of us, for a picnic in the summer. Jim and I,” she’d added in a
soft voice, her drenched eyes turned vaguely dreamy, “used to go up there a
lot.” A reminiscent smile tugged at her lips and pink tinged her cheeks. “It’s
possible Jackson was conceived up there.”
18 comments:
Wow, that grabs you right off the bat! Well done.
:-) Thanks Vicki.
What an attention grabber! I like the intro to this, it definitely leaves me wanting more.
What an opening to the story. I can't wait to see where it goes and hope they find the boy
I'm delighted the opening grabbed you Sarah :-) The next bit of the story is posted immediately below this week's TT post if you want to read more.
:-) Thanks Lindsay, To red the next bit scroll down to my previous post. I'll be doing a little bit more from this - but can tell you it finishes well.
You've sucked me in and left me hanging!! There had better be more next week. Well done. That's some hill!! I hope they find the boy, but I somehow doubt he'll be alive. Groan. MORE!
I love the use of the prompt. Your post this week is a great attention grabber- can't wait for more.
I only have one complaint ... it stopped!
I loved it - especially the opening lines. It caught me from the TT post. Excellent!
Jean, the next bit was actually posted first in last Sunday's snippet. I hope to do another bit this Sunday and then I'll see it I can tweak this week's TT prompt into the story but honestly it's going to be nigh-on impossible.
I'm happy dancing that the opening to this story has 'grabbed' you, Jillian. I loved writing this one.
:-) writerszenblog, thank you. If you scroll down one post you can read the next bit. I intend to add more this Sunday too.
Lovely heartrending opening that leaves this reader wanting more.
:-) Thanks Morgan
Can't wait for me ... nice start.
:-) Thanks Iris
Very touching there is so much more I want to know now.
Thanks S.E. I haven't managed to tweak this to suit the 'mirror' prompt but have put a bit more up in my Sunday Snippet post if you want to read more :-)
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