For today's Sunday Snippet I'm continuing a little bit further on from where I left off last week.
A medic came up and wrapped a blanket round his
shoulders. Automatically he drew it round himself. The slight warmth it offered
highlighted the cold that had seeped right into his bones. One part of his brain acknowledged it was
reaction; shock. The other accepted a greater part of it was due to the rage
still coursing through him and the need to remain and sound rational while in
the company of the people here to help those involved.
He dug his free hand into his pocket and touched
the small square box there.
So many dreams encompassed there, but never had he
anticipated they would include shattered dreams.
“Are you
hurt?” The voice came from somewhere far away, and Jim struggled to focus on
the source.
“Not physically,” he uttered in a voice devoid of emotion. ****
That's it for this week, :-) Thanks for coming by and you'll find lots more free-read snippets at Snippet Sunday
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30 comments:
Hi Sherry,
I found a nit or two in your excellent snippet, which had me wrapped up against the cold, along with your character.
in the sentence ending with ... touched the small square box [there]. (There is not neccessary and makes an echo in the following sentence.)
:-) Francene, good to see you. And, thanks for the catch, I always appreciate such help and comments. Hope all's well with you.
I could feel his despair. Well done.
Powerful snippet. I love how you slip in these details, which are both small and significant. Fantastic!
Very engaging snippet. Look forward to reading more!
My first visit--found out about you through your post on Book Blogs.
Catherine
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I agree--this is very powerful. You've got me backpeddling through the previous snippets to find out what happened. Terrific emotion.
Such despair in this snippet. My heart goes out to him. Well done!!
:-) Thanks Elaine.
:-) Thanks for your kind words Sarah
Catherine Healey, :-) Welcome to THoR, and thank you for coming over and your kind words. I'll hop over and visit your site too, thanks for leaving the link.
Oh, wow, Joanne, thank you for your kind words. I'm delighted you are enjoying this.
:-)Thanks Karen. I appreciate your kind words.
So the girl who passed at the speed of light causing the pile up--he was going to propose to? Oh wow. That is powerful. Jeez, the guilt of all of this on this guy. Excellent snippet.
Enjoyed the flow and inner monologue. Great!
Intriguing and powerful...excellent excerpt!
An emotional snippet, I felt his conflicting feelings.
Very moving snippet. Enjoyed it as always and look forward to more.
~Joyce Scarbrough
I'm glad this works for you History Sleuth. And I appreciate your kind words.
Thanks for your kind words Carrie Crain Books :-)
:-) Thanks Veronica
:-) Thanks for coming by, Paula, I appreciate it.
:-) Thanks Joyce, I appreciate your kind words.
Hard snippet. Good job, Sherry. :)
Aw, poor guy. Looking forward to more.
:-) Thanks Siobhan
Thanks Vivien :-)
Intriguing snippet, Sherry. I'm looking forward to the next instalment!
:-) Thanks Henriette
Wow...Intriguing and powerfully written. his despair shows clearly.
(Sorry this is so late!)
Ypu're always welcome Ryan, I'm glad you enjoyed this.
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