For today's Sunday Snippet I'm continuing from where I left off last week.
Swallowing against the bile threatening to choke
him, Jim closed the distance and looked into the wrecked car. The passenger had ducked, but not far
enough. And the driver— Well Jim could
only pray she hadn’t had time to know what was coming before the car hit the
trailer.
Unable to do anything for the people in the car, he grasped the man,
still gripping the door, by the arm and pulled him away to the side of the
road. Not sure if he would fall down, Jim pushed him down to sit on the damp
grass. He reckoned a wet arse would be the least of the man’s worries right
now.
That's
it for this week, :-) Thanks for coming by and you'll find lots more
free-read snippets at Snippet Sunday
31 comments:
I like the last line. It's a nice brush of humor during a pretty serious scene. I think it gives the reader a much needed breather. I've really started to enjoy your snippets.
I agree with Jess---sometimes dark humor is the only way to hold it together after something like this.
Very vivid snippet!
The last line pulled everything together. Nice job.
:-) Thanks Jess, I felt the scene needing a bit of humour to lighten it up a bit, too.
Thanks Sarah W. I appreciate your thoughts.
:-) Thanks Sandra.
I agree--I like the bit of humor amidst such a somber situation. Excellent description in this.
Dark humor when all seems so dire- brilliant writing!
:-) Thanks Joanne.
:-) Thanks Karen, I value your opinion.
How did I miss this when I joined Snippet Sunday last week? I had to go back a few weeks to read and catch up. Great scene!
Intriguing snippet, Sherry. Is the 'man' the passenger? Or the driver of the "trailer"? What a tense situation.
I love that last line. Guess it would be better to have a wet one. Very good hook but I'm already there. Can't wait to see what happens next. :-)
Shock can have that effect.
Yeah, I like the last line. A bit of relief from the previous intense scene. Great snippet.
:-) History Sleuth, I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to read back. Thanks for coming by.
Sobham, thanks for coming by, 'the man' was the driver of the farm tractor/trailer.
:-) Brenda, thanks for your kind words
Thanks for coming by Sue Ann.
:-) Gem, cut into bits like this seems to intensify the impact,I'm glad that last line works for everyone.
I feel for the man--glad Jim pushed him to sit down! That scene packed a punch! Well done! :)
Very tense scene, and I love the let up at the end. Great snippet.
"Unable to do anything for the people in the car, he grasped the man, still gripping the door, by the arm and pulled him away to the side of the road."
I see the commas, but I still had to read this two or three times to get it straight.
The, "..still gripping the door, by the arm.." part confused me.
Very intense snippet. Good job ending it on a lighter note. Looking forward to more!
~Joyce Scarbrough
:-) Thanks for coming by jane, I always appreciate comments and to discover what part impresses a reader.
:-) Thanks Kate, I appreciate your company.
Frank C. Etier :-) thanks for flagging up those errors, I appreciate that and have made a note.
The Belle in Blue, thanks for coming by. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Tense, dramatic snippet. Vivid description of the crash aftermath, Sherry.
Thanks for your visit and your kind words, Ryan.
Having witnessed a fatal accident (and hoping never again), I have to say you're doing an excellent job of taking me back to that moment.
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