3 March 2013

Snippet Sunday 03-03-13

Thank you to everyone who visited last week and to those who left comments. Your thoughts are always appreciated.

For today's Sunday Snippet I'm continuing from where I left off last week.
Swallowing against the bile threatening to choke him, Jim closed the distance and looked into the wrecked car.  The passenger had ducked, but not far enough.  And the driver— Well Jim could only pray she hadn’t had time to know what was coming before the car hit the trailer.
Unable to do anything for the people in the car, he grasped the man, still gripping the door, by the arm and pulled him away to the side of the road. Not sure if he would fall down, Jim pushed him down to sit on the damp grass. He reckoned a wet arse would be the least of the man’s worries right now.


That's it for this week, :-) Thanks for coming by and you'll find lots more free-read snippets at Snippet Sunday

31 comments:

Jess Schira said...

I like the last line. It's a nice brush of humor during a pretty serious scene. I think it gives the reader a much needed breather. I've really started to enjoy your snippets.

Sarah W said...

I agree with Jess---sometimes dark humor is the only way to hold it together after something like this.

Very vivid snippet!

Sandra Sookoo said...

The last line pulled everything together. Nice job.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Jess, I felt the scene needing a bit of humour to lighten it up a bit, too.

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Sarah W. I appreciate your thoughts.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Sandra.

Joanne Stewart said...

I agree--I like the bit of humor amidst such a somber situation. Excellent description in this.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Dark humor when all seems so dire- brilliant writing!

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Joanne.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Karen, I value your opinion.

History Sleuth said...

How did I miss this when I joined Snippet Sunday last week? I had to go back a few weeks to read and catch up. Great scene!

Siobhan Muir said...

Intriguing snippet, Sherry. Is the 'man' the passenger? Or the driver of the "trailer"? What a tense situation.

Brenda Ashworth Barry said...

I love that last line. Guess it would be better to have a wet one. Very good hook but I'm already there. Can't wait to see what happens next. :-)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Shock can have that effect.

Gem Sivad said...

Yeah, I like the last line. A bit of relief from the previous intense scene. Great snippet.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) History Sleuth, I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to read back. Thanks for coming by.

SherryGLoag said...

Sobham, thanks for coming by, 'the man' was the driver of the farm tractor/trailer.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Brenda, thanks for your kind words

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks for coming by Sue Ann.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Gem, cut into bits like this seems to intensify the impact,I'm glad that last line works for everyone.

Jane Wakely said...

I feel for the man--glad Jim pushed him to sit down! That scene packed a punch! Well done! :)

Kate said...

Very tense scene, and I love the let up at the end. Great snippet.

Frank C. Etier said...

"Unable to do anything for the people in the car, he grasped the man, still gripping the door, by the arm and pulled him away to the side of the road."
I see the commas, but I still had to read this two or three times to get it straight.
The, "..still gripping the door, by the arm.." part confused me.

The Belle in Blue said...

Very intense snippet. Good job ending it on a lighter note. Looking forward to more!

~Joyce Scarbrough

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks for coming by jane, I always appreciate comments and to discover what part impresses a reader.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Kate, I appreciate your company.

SherryGLoag said...

Frank C. Etier :-) thanks for flagging up those errors, I appreciate that and have made a note.

SherryGLoag said...

The Belle in Blue, thanks for coming by. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Ryan Derham said...

Tense, dramatic snippet. Vivid description of the crash aftermath, Sherry.

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks for your visit and your kind words, Ryan.

sarahballance said...

Having witnessed a fatal accident (and hoping never again), I have to say you're doing an excellent job of taking me back to that moment.