Thank you to everyone who visited last week and to those who left comments. Your thoughts are always appreciated.
For today's Sunday Snippet I'm continuing a little bit further on from where I left off last week.
“Do I understand the driver of the…” The officer
gestured towards the remains of the sports car.
“Are you saying the driver passed you on a blind bend?”
What could he do? Jim nodded, unable to get any
words passed his now frozen vocal cords. Rage ripped through him sharp as a
sword. Neither of them deserved to be shielded from their own stupidity. They
may not have survived, but why should he, the living victim of their betrayal
shield them from the truth of their own stupid and senseless actions?
“Yes.” Just
one word. And he felt a traitor and yet still rocked by betrayal.
(I understand this is slightly over-long, but couldn't shorten it without losing the impact.)
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26 comments:
Intense scene! I can feel his rage and his grief.
Great response in the example below, but make sure you add the 'm' to this powerful line!
"Rage ripped through hi(m) sharp as a sword."
Fantastic snippet! I want more!!
Was this a stupid "chicken" game? Awesomely powerful hook.
:-) Thanks for the catch, Karen, have corrected it here and on the original. I appreciate your company and comment.
No, Gem, no game of chicken. I've taken a true incident (where all survived!) and twisted it to suit. The idiots really did pass us on a blind bend.
I love how your handling this scene. It's very intense and intriguing.
Such an intense scene. Why would they pass like that is so intriguing and has me wanting more information. Great job on this! :-)
Yes, a lot of intensity here. Very well done!
Wonderfully tense scene!
Tense and powerful. Well done!
God the guilt the guy must feel to act like he doesn't have a clue who it is or why it happened. I keep coming back every week. Great scene!
Intense scene, Sherry--esp that last line! I'm looking forward to reading more! :)
Wow, survivors guilt and yet vindication. Good snippet, Sherry. :)
Why does he feel betrayed? Great hook and I want to read more. :-)
Thanks jess :-)
Brenda, I have to say that in the actual instance they were just big headed idiots - how do i know? they were kind neighbours once removed.
:-) Thanks Kate.
:-) Glad you liked it Sandra.
:-) Thanks Willa
:-) History Sleuth I'm so glad you are enjoying this. You've made my day.
:-) Thanks Jane.
:-) Thanks Siobham
:-) Good question Karysa. Thanks for coming by?
Very conflicted. Poor Jim.
:-) Thanks for coming by Elin
Very well written, Sherry!
:-) Thanks Sarah.
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