19 November 2011

Sweet Saturday Samples

Welcome back to another Sweet Saturday Sample.  And thank you to everyone who visits, and leaves comments.

Today I am carrying on from where I left off last week on Six Sunday Sentence.

“So do I, sweetheart. So do I.” He wrapped his arms around his children and rested his chin on their soft golden curls.

He’d tried her cell phone.

Nothing!

He’d checked with the police. No accidents reported in his vicinity. Did that mean…what? His fingers tunneled through his dark hair.

Since he’d brought Alice, the wrong twin, to the ranch, six years ago, she’d never stopped moaning. The isolation gave her the creeps; she wanted kids. He gave her two. They were noisy, dirty and a nuisance; she wanted out of the marriage. He negotiated total parental rights, and Alice smiled sweetly before disappearing from their lives. A week later Jim, the local Sherriff, informed Luke of his wife’s death in a head-on-car-collision.

Please come back tomorrow for another six sentences of this story.

18 comments:

Tess Grant said...

Nicely done. I like the litany of what she wants, what she gets, and how it isn't right. Very true to life.

Jean said...

Reminds me of the old adage, "be careful what you wish for..." great piece and you left me hanging. So now when is the right twin going to show up? Super writing, Sherry.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Great job characterizing her.

Ute Carbone said...

Love the way you make me feel for him because of her!

Miss Pickles (alias Sandra Allen) said...

You made me feel distaste for her and sympathy for him. Well done!

Jenna said...

How the heck did he bring the wrong twin? And why didn't he take her back? Hope he gets the right one now. Sounds like he deserves better.

Lindsay said...

Interesting and intriguing

diannehartsock said...

The poor man! I hope the right twin comes along for him. Well done. You have me wanting more. :)

mirriamsmyth said...

I love his tenderness with his children. And the flashback of his life with Alice reminds me that saying: "Be careful what you wish for."

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Tess, I'm glad it works for you. Thanks for your visit.

Sherry Gloag said...

So true, Jean. Thanks for your kind words.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Elaine, I value your comments.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Ute. I appreciate your visit.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks, Miss Pickles/Sandra. I'm glad it worked for you.

Sherry Gloag said...

Well Jenna, with only 1000 word to work with at the time, I hoped no one would ask that question!!! LOL.
Guess the wrong twin was too convincing!

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Thanks Lindsay.

Sherry Gloag said...

Dianne, the right twin is stuck out there in the rain with a flat tyre! :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

mirraim, so true. Thanks for coming by.