12 November 2011

Sweet Saturday Sample

Wow, where has this week gone?  thank you to everyone who's visited, and left comments.  You're all appreciated.
This week is a continuation of my published short story, Thanks Given.
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Now, for the first time since her sister’s funeral, three years ago, she’d agreed to return to their ranch for their Thanksgiving holiday.

No signal! She stuffed her fist into her mouth to prevent a scream of frustration. With exaggerated care she returned her phone to her bag before wrenching the driver’s door open and stepping into the torrential rain. She popped the trunk and gazed in horror at the empty space. No tyre! In the deepening dark, her fingers searched for a nut or bolt that could hold a spare tyre beneath the trunk.

Nothing!

Several European cars cradled their spare wheels beneath the car body. No way would she grovel about in the rain and dirt to confirm her suspicions. Loudly, and without censorship, she damned the man who designed the car. No woman would tolerate a design that turned reaching for a spare wheel into a life-threatening operation.

I am offering six more sentences from this story tomorrow, please come back.

26 comments:

Patricia Preston said...

I would hate to be in her situation. I'd have no idea what to do either. Great emotion.

Jean said...

I can feel the growing anger and frustration, Sherry. Well done! And, yes, I'd like to throttle the man who invented that car design...and the man who invented the corset and brassiere! Great writing!

sarahballance said...

I can definitely feel her frustration, but I had to laugh at the last line. That was fabulous!

Ute Carbone said...

I can identify with her frustration, and I love the last line- seems like exactly the question I'd ask. :)

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Vivid scene, and one that almost any woman can identify with. I always enjoy your writing and appreciate your comments on my blog.

Elaine Cantrell said...

I feel for her. Great sample.

sue said...

OMG - what dire circumstances. though I bet it all ends well, eh?

Sherry Gloag said...

Me too, Patricia, thanks for coming by.

Sherry Gloag said...

They have a lot to answer for, but heaven help us we gals can't do without them. (A bit like computers! rofl)

Sherry Gloag said...

Sarah the spare wheel on our car is underneath, and I do NOT like it! Not only is it difficult to reach but filthy to handle!
So I enjoyed having a rant through her pov. :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks for coming by and your comment, Ute

Sherry Gloag said...

Sandy Nachlinger Thank you for you kind and generous comment, and I enjoy visiting your site, too.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Elaine. :-)

Sherry Gloag said...

Sue :-) I do like HEA's thanks for commenting.

Jenna said...

I've been stranded by a car enough to sympathize thoroughly with her frustration. She is right to rant! Great description--you put me there.

Marsha Ward said...

ARGH! Written so true-to-life you can smell the rain! Thanks, Sherry!

Patricia Kiyono said...

Oh, what an awful bind she's in! I can feel her pain. Nice sample, and I can't wait to read more!

mirriamsmyth said...

Forget that! Psh, crawling under a car for a spare? No thanks. Love the sample :) Love the story!

diannehartsock said...

I agree with her! I'd probably throw a fit, but end up crawling under the car for the spare anyway. I wouldn't want to be stranded in the storm like that. Great description here!

Thanks for stopping by my site today. :)

Sherry Gloag said...

Being stranded is not funny, thanks for coming by, Jenna.

Sherry Gloag said...

'Smell the rain' What a great description, Marsh, :-) Thanks for your comment.

Sherry Gloag said...

Thanks Patricia, there's another 6 sentences in SSS - Six Sentence Sunday.

Sherry Gloag said...

:-) Thanks Mirriam.

Sherry Gloag said...

Well, Diane, if I was in that position, I'd just have to get stuck in. Remember changing a flat tyre once, and all the time a couple of guys stood by and watched! LOL.
She's a lot luckier!

Tess Grant said...

I feel her frustration! Nicely done.

Rachel Rossano said...

Frustration! Thank you for another great excerpt. :) I loved her tirade about the position of the tyre. :)