This week is a continuation of my published short story, Thanks Given.
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Now, for the first time since her sister’s funeral, three years ago, she’d agreed to return to their ranch for their Thanksgiving holiday.
No signal! She stuffed her fist into her mouth to prevent a scream of frustration. With exaggerated care she returned her phone to her bag before wrenching the driver’s door open and stepping into the torrential rain. She popped the trunk and gazed in horror at the empty space. No tyre! In the deepening dark, her fingers searched for a nut or bolt that could hold a spare tyre beneath the trunk.
Nothing!
Several European cars cradled their spare wheels beneath the car body. No way would she grovel about in the rain and dirt to confirm her suspicions. Loudly, and without censorship, she damned the man who designed the car. No woman would tolerate a design that turned reaching for a spare wheel into a life-threatening operation.
26 comments:
I would hate to be in her situation. I'd have no idea what to do either. Great emotion.
I can feel the growing anger and frustration, Sherry. Well done! And, yes, I'd like to throttle the man who invented that car design...and the man who invented the corset and brassiere! Great writing!
I can definitely feel her frustration, but I had to laugh at the last line. That was fabulous!
I can identify with her frustration, and I love the last line- seems like exactly the question I'd ask. :)
Vivid scene, and one that almost any woman can identify with. I always enjoy your writing and appreciate your comments on my blog.
I feel for her. Great sample.
OMG - what dire circumstances. though I bet it all ends well, eh?
Me too, Patricia, thanks for coming by.
They have a lot to answer for, but heaven help us we gals can't do without them. (A bit like computers! rofl)
Sarah the spare wheel on our car is underneath, and I do NOT like it! Not only is it difficult to reach but filthy to handle!
So I enjoyed having a rant through her pov. :-)
Thanks for coming by and your comment, Ute
Sandy Nachlinger Thank you for you kind and generous comment, and I enjoy visiting your site, too.
Thanks Elaine. :-)
Sue :-) I do like HEA's thanks for commenting.
I've been stranded by a car enough to sympathize thoroughly with her frustration. She is right to rant! Great description--you put me there.
ARGH! Written so true-to-life you can smell the rain! Thanks, Sherry!
Oh, what an awful bind she's in! I can feel her pain. Nice sample, and I can't wait to read more!
Forget that! Psh, crawling under a car for a spare? No thanks. Love the sample :) Love the story!
I agree with her! I'd probably throw a fit, but end up crawling under the car for the spare anyway. I wouldn't want to be stranded in the storm like that. Great description here!
Thanks for stopping by my site today. :)
Being stranded is not funny, thanks for coming by, Jenna.
'Smell the rain' What a great description, Marsh, :-) Thanks for your comment.
Thanks Patricia, there's another 6 sentences in SSS - Six Sentence Sunday.
:-) Thanks Mirriam.
Well, Diane, if I was in that position, I'd just have to get stuck in. Remember changing a flat tyre once, and all the time a couple of guys stood by and watched! LOL.
She's a lot luckier!
I feel her frustration! Nicely done.
Frustration! Thank you for another great excerpt. :) I loved her tirade about the position of the tyre. :)
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